this was the best thing ive read in my whole life thnx :)
Some of my poems, much like yours, are fatalistic. I dig your style and great use of words. I might suggest spell checking though. There are some very simple misspellings that I found myself fixating on rather than your word intention. I would be willing to edit if you need a second set of eyes. I can't wait to read more from you. Your poetry has a very Gothic edge.
I liked this. It leaks like an open sore. It reads a bit juvenial but aren't all arguments juvenial? What I mean by that is, this is raw ranting, it isn't supposed to be thought out or even reflective yet you use some fantastic wordplay. I am eager to read to more.