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Sky Blue

Forever is real Von:
Sky Blue
It is a continuous memory. Every piece of it, the flashbacks, the smiles, and the glances from those sky blue eyes. I know, forever is real.

Stichwörter: 
forever, blue eyes
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tj.gonzales

Valerie: You write from the heart....Your experiences are so sweet. I was shy once and know now that everyone has the strength to jump away from shyness. Sometimes one has to take a chance....Just jump!

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valerieevening

Thank you so much for your wonderful comment. Yes, I hope too that someday I'll overcome my shyness. Thanks for the advice. :) ^_^

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Gelöschter User

i liked your story..keep me posted if you right more..

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valerieevening

Thanks for your comment and for making my story one of your favorites :)

Gelöschter User

your welcome :) i was just really captivated by the tone of innocense your story has

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angamonkey

So far so good, but please keep track of your tenses. At times you're looking at the story from above, other times its as if things are occurring in the present and you are experiencing them as they go along. And careful of too many of the same words in one place ex: karate people and the word golden to describe the boy and his hair.

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valerieevening

Thank you for your comments and I appreciate the suggestions for improving my story. :)

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