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Part 1 A story about a forbidden love between a human girl and a boy thats half vampire half werewolf Von:
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Sarah a normal human librarian that finds herself falling in love with Damion, who is half vampire, Half werewolf. What will she do if she finds out the truth? Damion on the other hand, also finds himself falling in love with Sarah. But will the laws of his kind allow them to be together or will they try to kill Sarah?


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Part 1 A story about a forbidden love between a human girl and a boy thats half vampire half werewolf
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Choices
Part 2- Will Sarah be killed? Or will Damion decide to changer her after she has the baby?
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Final Decision
Part 3- Damion has a choice to either change Sarah or let her be killed. What will he do?
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vampires, werewolf, love, forbidden, sarah, damion
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shaela

creat interest and intriegue. A story is a journey. There should be more to it, than just getting from point A "the meeting", to point B "the consequence".

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seika456

I know I'm thinking of rewriting this

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shaela

not much character developement. what are the characters actually like? Immortal vampire? He's lived through alot. He knows his actions Will affect the future. Even the descisions of mortals can affect the future, but he has many more chances to do so than most. I'd think he'd weigh "turning point" actions more heavily.

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seika456

Thanks for the advice. I'm thinking of rewriting it

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shaela

can't make a decent comment. kind of choppy writing & contrived plot. deliberate meeting, deliberate "love", predictable couse of action.

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seika456

Yeah I know. I was still starting out somewhat when writing this

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Gelöschter User

Goood(: I think you should add more to it.

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seika456

im goias soon as i get internet at home imng to im up in michigan at my dads

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Viper365

What will happen next and you should keep going, you could make a mini-series.

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