The Beginning of the End

The Beginning of the End
the cullens left bella.bella has a child and then victoria a vampire with a human daughter bella meets the family that she once called her own again.....

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The story itself was good but some parts were a little confusing I think u should go back and describe the story some more

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And Bella was turned after renesma if that how you spell it and vampires can't give birth

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I liked it. However, the grammar, spelling, and punctuation are off. Please finish writing it. If you need an editor, I would be happy to help.

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This story's plot line is quite puzzling. There is also a lot of grammatical/spelling errors, and just a lot of things that don't make sense. It's not that the story's bad, but it's just so confusing to the point where it makes readers lose faith in the story.

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it was realy good but some things were abit mugled up if you get what i mean but just one thing how did bella turn into a vampire because ime not shore it said but it was realy good and i think that you should write another about what edward has been up to i think it would be cool lol and then a therd about them meating up after so long and where are the were wolves doesnt matter all together it was realy good and i hope you write another

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where did it start was very confusing and hard to understand bad startings and endings half was missed spelled

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