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Jack will live

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Jack will live
It is 2021. Jack is getting ready for his birthday, but does not want to celebrate anything. The streets are empty and everything is quiet...

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Jack will live.
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Mico

enjoyed it so much :p tho so inaccurate sometimes XD

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fran

enjoyed what little there was to read, am interested in reading the rest when it is completed

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lshilo

Hi Perry,

Very interesting premise. I like it!
The first sentence hooked me, like it should.

You gave the dog a flaw,(being vegetarian), another good hook.

Yup, I think you've got a keeper:)

Aside from editing and finishing up, I think it should do well.

Thanks for the read,
Lee:)

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robastor

I get the feeling there is more to this story. I like post apocalyptic tales. Here's a few tips to help you.

Nine years is a long time. Stuff left in a grocery store will have rotted or been eaten by rodents, except canned stuff, and most of those will probably have exploded.

Does Jack have a plan or a destination? Putting that in will drive you plot more. And, another good plot point, the relationship between Jack and Riley.... mehr anzeigen

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charly.books

Dear robastor,

Yea my grammar is wack, thats because i speak dutch english and afrikaans.
I know, post apocalyptic story's are cool. they inspire people to adventuristic toughts. I could use a spelling check in my book, maybe you want to team up ? anyway what considers... mehr anzeigen

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