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Primary Directive

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Primary Directive
Judgment Day has come and gone, and the verdict wasn't good.

After a nuclear catastrophe wipes out most of the world, ailing roboticist Carlisle Evans and one of his earlier creations are among the few left in a world of marauders and ruins.

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apocalypse, robot, contest entry, sci fi
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Gelöschter User

Extraordinary ending. It was succinct, yet it spoke volumes.

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RevkenR

Wonderful story. Well written and interesting. I never thought of the story being from the robot's perspective.

Good luck in the contest

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P. K. Gallagher

Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it.

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S.P. Johnson Jr.

Wow. This is great. Thanks for sharing. I loved it. I can't believe this is your first attempt at sci-fi.

A quick formatting issue you'll want to fix while you have time: on page four at "'You're leaving again...'" you need to shift the blocking. You have the robot's action attached to the man's dialogue, and you need to move it down to precede the robot's dialogue. I think you have a really good chance with this contest, and... mehr anzeigen

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P. K. Gallagher

Oh wow! I know better than to do that; I have no idea what I did it here. Thank you for pointing it out and for the positive feedback. It's always nice to hear when my writing efforts don't fall flat :).

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glenmarcus

I love the descriptive viewpoint from the robot. Though the coldness of the unit is evident, the "primary directive" makes it seem caring and devoted to Carlisle. Fine first effort at the Science Fiction genre P.K.!

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P. K. Gallagher

Thank you!

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Glynis Rankin

I loved it, wonderful! I love her voice, the confusion, the decisions. I love it all, well done!

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P. K. Gallagher

Thank you! I'm glad you think so, since it's my first try at Sci-Fi :)

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