Hello. I am Icygem1300. I have written a book that revolves around the elements, too.
I plan to write a series of six(I think...).
I like your book a lot, even though I haven't read much:)
I hope to read it all, and would you mind reading my book and commenting on it?
The book is called Elementess.
Thank You, and sincerely
Good beginning, but be careful with the proofreading. There are some mistakes. Also let the readers form images, create the pictures as a puzzle, give them clues and let them create the bigger picture in their minds( It's called showing not telling, try to think about the difference). I can't wait to see the rest. :)