Easier to appreciate the quality of your writing. I believe you uploaded in PDF. Redo it in the normal BookRix upload method.
BECAUSE you are an excellent writer and I'd like everybody to be able to see just how good you are.
Expand your range, your word count; you have all the tools to excel. It's easy enough for all to see.
Oh, yes. This was a great little story with maximum impact.
Of course...the child's imagined terrors becoming real, and all because of her parents' depraved "game", which is no game.
You showed Rachel's emotions perfectly, employed back story exactly as needed in the space allowed. I am struck by the highest quality of this short work. Congratulations :) :) :)