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My favorite of your stories.
Well done
Wendy xx

your favorite t.v. show has got to be Criminal Minds. You are a twisted little puppy Michael. But nevertheless you have my vote.

good story, Michael, but - it would have benefited from a massive reduction in commas, you use far too many - and a flowing together of some of your sentences, which are abrupt and somewhat awkward. If you read this aloud to yourself, pausing at ALL the commas, you will see where there are too many pauses, and then stop at the full stops and see where sentences could have run together.
You have loads of potential with stories like this:L had it come in for one of my many anthologies I would have accepted it, revised it for you and put it in. So yes, the ideas are there for sure, excellent horror ideas, just need to get the writing up to the level where editors will take it. Not everyone edits and revises as I do!

Happy to give you a well deserved vote.

Once more, you've managed to creep me out in less than a page. The last line is classic and what a great twist on an old tale. Another vote coming your way.

I need a better system on this reading and voting thing...

Poe would be proud...voted.

Forgive me that word, lol...but, yes, it really is. A great, surprise ending to be sure, but the narrative is so smooth as well!
Love your cover!

Nicely written with an unexpected "reversal" on the monster concept.

What a lethal combination...not darkness and dust bunnies but Michael Cannata and Flash Fiction. Here's another fine mess you gotten us into again. Great job.

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