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The Stalker

User: epoch1
The Stalker
Six women over the past two years had met a horrible fate doing exactly what she was doing. She was practically begging to meet the same fate. The wooded path was long and winding, dimly lit even in the best places

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In so few words, the power of the sentences truly tell the story and wrap it up neatly...and yes I agree with Pat, double tap and you're done.

one more vote!

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Gelöschter User

Another great example of Flash Fiction from a master.

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J.C. Laird

A good example of what flash fiction is supposed to be. Your "illusions" of events remind me of a magician's sleight of hand. Here goes another vote.

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Really enjoyed this one, and I think it is one of your best. Great ending! You have a vote from me.

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I wish I could get hold of this story on my word pad and re-arrange your sentences. You remind me of me, in a way, from when I started out and my writing was often confusing.

Take a sentence like:

He'd been concealed in the bushes by the park road since nightfall.


While he was in the bushes, had he been concealed by the road??
Are the bushes at the side of the road, where he is concealed???

Also, I hesitated over whether... mehr anzeigen

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Jarring. Pertinent. But the ending dismayed me...I would have shot the S.O.B. right between the eyes!

A proper ending to a great story filled with suspense anyway:)

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This is true "flash" fiction. Short, complete, with a surprise ending. Love your work, Michael. Good luck to you.

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