You have a delightful sense of humor I noticed in the comment below! LOL Actually you write quite well. You have a good vocabulary, it's been awhile since I have read the word 'molder'. You do well at moving the scene. I would suggest using 'mum' when the child calls out to their mother. Building the story well, good emotion. Robynn
Stichwörter:I glanced at the window and was immediately star-struck at the sight of the... mehr anzeigen I glanced at the window and was immediately star-struck at the sight of the Statue. It was green-blue, the color of the English Channel back home. If I was at home in Lincolnshire, I would be swimming in the clear waters, and Mum would lift me out of it and gently dry my hair....'Don't think like that or you will cry.' I reminded myself. I wouldn't admit to anyone beside myself, but I was scared. Scared to live here and find out what will happen here, the strangest of all places......
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