Tears Of My Tortured Soul

Tears Of My Tortured Soul
I hope you like this book (my first book)

Dieses Buch ist Teil der Reihe "Tears"
Alle Bücher dieser Reihe:
Tears Of My Tortured Soul
Tears, Tortured, Vampires, Werewoles, Hydras
Beiträge und Kommentare
Wichtiger Beitrag

Well I really don't like you. Your boring.

2 Kommentare
Dieser Kommentar wurde gelöscht.
Wichtiger Beitrag

I believe you are 10 years old? According to your profile. I actually wrote really bad when I was around 13, I did not have the proper use of grammar and I did not use descriptive words. Not to mention I thought using acronyms was okay as if everyone would know what it meant.

You have good dialogue for your age. Practice will make you great! So keep writing and ask someone older than you, which is what I did after I stopped... mehr anzeigen

Wichtiger Beitrag

Okay so here's the dealio, descriptions, descriptions, descriptions. When writing a story you have to describe everything. The smells, the sights, the sounds, the taste if there is one, the emotions, everything. If you don't then your reader might get bored and stop. It is a really good story and I liked it, and it's going to be even better if you used descriptions. :)

Wichtiger Beitrag

At the get go you have some very confusing dialogue. Many people like myself won't even get past the first page with that going on. So you need to transition the conversation's a lot better than you have them at the moment. Also you are not writing this like a normal book. It almost seems like you are trying to do journal entries. This is going to be a bad start for it if you plan on going further. You might need to rethink... mehr anzeigen

Wichtiger Beitrag

Thanks guys for these comments. I have like a 2 hour audio book. It took me hours just to create it!

Wichtiger Beitrag

Its gud:). Try being more flowing.. Lol Keep on writing

1 Kommentar

shud i read this book, 2, aaliyah? lOl :-) :-? :-? :-? :-? :-? :-P 8-) :D =;-) 8-) 8-) xD :-D :-? :-)

Weitere Beiträge anzeigen
Um eine optimale Funktionsweise zu gewährleisten, verwendet unsere Website Cookies. Durch die Nutzung der Website stimmst Du der Verwendung von Cookies zu. Mehr Infos
Top of page
Kein Miniaturbild Entfernen Bitte wähle einen Grund aus Bitte gib die Stelle im Buch an. de de_DE