this one is actually non-fiction. it's about my mom's illness & then an illness i had years ago.
- i think it's my best writing. it's hard for me to stay in that place, though ... that almost dream-like poetic place but it seems to work.
I like this type of writing. Very abstract and real. Most thinking is quite abstract, and then as educated humans, we feel the need to administer to it. The raw emotions are still here.
Pump some more of this stuff out . I'll hit dig through your other pieces as well. I know i'll find some more great stuff.
Thanks for this John.
I dig this. You have some really great lines in here, but it could do with a little cleaning up. I understand that it's written in a Kerouac kinda train-of-thought style, and that's cool, but you should still have your verb tenses agree. Still, you do hit on some brilliant lines, like saying a psych ward is "the kind of hospital where you don't know you're sick."