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A Rainbow Window

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A Rainbow Window
A woman finds that she has questions regarding a religious type dream she has. In her own way, she acts upon this dream to try to give her life meaning and fulfillment

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bluedragon

for your comments. I will have another look and see what can be changed or n ot as I see fit. I do though thank you for reading the piece. Of course, kif you are a believer, you will think that the Bible if The Word and n othing in it is wrong. My character does not believe, or rather, does not know iof she believes or not. You have to put your mind into the character's mind. What you, the writer, believes makes no... mehr anzeigen

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robbedbygreed

You've got talent, and I can see you worked very hard on the piece. But remember to keep at it and continue to write so that words come out like water from an underground stream.

However, the beginning was a tad robotic, too much like a list. It felt a bit like this: she saw, she did, she thought, she did, she saw... etc. Maybe to smooth it all out a bit you could refer to her sitting on the window seat and her nap is past... mehr anzeigen

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bluedragon

thanks for saving this work of mine to your favourites. I am so pleased you enjoyed rwading the work Evelyn/Bluedragon

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bluedragon

I am pleaseed that you enjoyed reading this work of mine. A lot of the work I have posted here is old, so I knew I must bring my skills on short stories up to date. Finding a subject to write about, there one has it! Evelyn/Bluedragon ps thanks for saving it to your favs.

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lazarus67

To keep my comment simple...I would just have to say...'This is a lovely story, and well written.'

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