Never Throw Boloney

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User: bold123
Never Throw Boloney
Madeline Farrell has a perfectly normal life-with the exception of almost half of it. Will Maddie ever survive 8 grade, or will she forever be baloney?

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Teen, Humor
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Rgabel

You captured the emotions of the age, the atmosphere, the conflict in friendships well. Could use some tightening, as we all do in our work, but this is an excellent story. Good Job! Robynn

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hanna14

I agree with evercaptivating. It is a good story, and it starts off very well. I love your style of writing as well. :)
But I agree that there are a few unneeded sentences, but I have that same problem. But other than a few minor issues, I think it's flowing smoothly and it's a good book so far. :)

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bold123

Thanks for the helpful advice! Reading it again I do see that I have uneeded sentences. I'll try to think of that next time!
Thanks again!

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evercaptivating

Very good start!! There were parts that were a little fast and could be deleted out because you are rushing through them then why dies the reader need to read them. Just an editorial note there. Great start though, loved the developement of your character.

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