Hey I sorry I didn't get to read your story until now, I've been a bit out of commission. I greatly enjoyed your story, thank you for recommending it. I must say the cover is an eye catcher, and I know it had to be short for the contest but I hope you lengthen and detail it some more. Again good job :)
This is a brave snapshot, if you will. I gather it met the requirements for a competition but, to my mind, it appears a window into a much greater story. I hope you save it and plan to develop it one day. Nicely done, Chloe.
By the way, it was the cover that caught my eye.