Thanks SO much! That just... it made my day. Possibly even my week. =]
It's an excerpt from a fanfiction that I started writing a couple years ago, and then never finished it. The whole story isn't written like this, though. This was a one time thing, and although I've tried and tried to write more with a description like this, I haven't been able to do it. Thanks for the heart, and the compliments!
This MUST be an excerpt from a short story or a novel. It's excellent.
Beginning on page 6...the physical description...it's everything a reader could want in a piece of narrative! Seamless.
Everything about this short shouts professional. Well done, Cassidy. In fact, great!