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I read it and I have to say, I'm really looking forward to see....LOL...what happens next. You have done a good job with this, I'm with Yezall on the embellishments, lets see it girl. I know its there. Got it on lock so let me know when the next installment will be. also on the first page, you got again when she's hiding in the shadows, but I think you meant against.
I prefer less embellishments when describing sex. That's me, others my read it and say WOW! I think if you told a longer tale people would get a chance to know your characters and care about them. You have the gift you just have to hone your skills. You're doin great!