love the Aizen background. he's the craziest charcter I've ever seen. and love your current profile pic- Byakuya and Renji are best team of the court guard squads, despite the fact that Renji almost died when fighting Byuakuya in the first arc.
Well that's a problem. I love stories like that, but I just can't read former poetry. I mean I've been reading 'Dauntes Inferno' and I'm absolutely mind bogled. And I have no idea why I used that word.
For an 18 year old, you show great promise as a great writer. If the rest of the book is as good as this 'snipet', I have no doubts that it will be also excellent. But please finish it before you die...lol.